Hi Bodee,

My name is Lyn. I am doing this review for Simply Positive. (review 1 of week April 10-16)

Please remember I am a writer, I know what it feels like to be reviewed! I have only my humble opinion to offer; please take what you feel is helpful and disregard the rest. Only YOU know what is right for your writing!

Title: I Died Again Last Night. The title is what drew me to visit you.

First Impression: Wow, there is a lot of pent up emotion here.

What I liked: I loved the image you created with the faded echo finally escaping the canyon walls.

What needs your attention: I liked how in the beginning you had I died again last night separate from the stanza. It felt like a natural pause and gave emphasis to what I read. However, once you included it in the stanza it lost its power to me. Just for consideration, I'm suggesting you also isolate the two you have included in the stanzas.

Favorite Parts: I feel the opening three stanzas give the most chilling image to the minds eye. Especially chilled by the ice of infidelity. That particular stanza just jumps at me. Awesome!

Overall Impression: I think it awesome. Great Job, Bodie.

Thank you for letting me read your work.
Lyn



My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .