I like the ending of the story. Ethan and Ashley find love, what could be sweeter?

I like the way you used both physical and emotional love to finish the story. One without the other isn't as pure as having both at the same time.

You have again used good description to portray your character's emotions. Throughout the story the character's emotions move up and down, good and bad. But the way you described those emotions made it easy to follow, and easy to see that the characters were striving to find each other. Very well done!

Your story has everything. Characters that start off by trying to avoid each other. Then when they find each other their pasts nearly keep them apart. But your story shows that love is more important that past sins, and emotional love can allow for forgiveness. And you used the physical side of love in an appropriate way; not too much, not too little.

I enjoyed reading the six chapters of this story, and I hope that you have found my suggestions and comments helpful.

Keep writing.


Bikerider