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Overall Impressions:

Haha! My overall impression is you are much too nice to this cheating man, but knowing what I do of you so far, it fits your personality perfectly. A gentle note letting him go, leaving him behind, and reminding him to treat his new love in a good way or she'll leave him feeling as hurt as he left you, and he'll be left all alone.


Form:


This form falls within the parameters of the contest as free-verse poem as listed in the poems rules.


Imagery:


I saw a woman strong enough to walk away but an unable to face the man who broke her heart. She walks away in time realizing she needs to find happiness and with this cheating man holding her back she'll never find what she's looking for. She gave him her ebst and is moving on and reminds him of his mistakes so that maybe he won't make them again and be left alone too late to find happiness himself.


Favorite Parts:

Love her as
you once loved me,
but be sure you
remain true.
Her heart shall
wilt and she will also go;
leaving you to
ponder your life
alone.

I enjoyed this part for when ones mind is at peace and not filled with bitterness you can remind those who you have loved yet have harmed you of what mistakes the should avoid in the future so that they don't end up as alone as they have made others feel. Very nicely done.

Suggestions:

My suggestion is simply in formatting. I felt there should've been some spacing between stanzas so that everything wasn't jammed together. It'd make it easier to read. Also removing the italicization from the entire poem would make it easier on the eyes as well.

That's it!


Additional Comments:

This poem says so much about your personality. At least I felt it did considering the past situations I've seen you in involving ridiculous confrontation. So I felt like I get an even larger peek at you as a person and that made this even more of a joy to read!

Thank you for your entry and good luck in the contest!

I enjoyed reading your work and hope my review was helpful and encouraging!!!

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