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 The Flower  [E]
When I think of what kind of flower she would be...
by Caleb Rose
Review of The Flower  
Review by Charlie ~
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Rated: E | (3.5)
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Hello, Caleb Rose . My name is Charlie and I’m happy to be reviewing your poem that I found on the "Read a Newbie" page. Thank you for sharing with us and giving me this opportunity to review. The following are just my personal opinions as a reader. I am not a professional. If you find something useful, awesome! If not, feel free to dismiss this. *Cool*



*Questiono* Title

*Infoo* This is a good title for the poem. The title, coupled with the description, made me want to read your poem.


*Questionb* Subject Matter and Theme

*Infob* This is a romantic poem comparing the narrator's girl to a flower. It's a nice thing to compare a girl to because there are so many different ways you can go with it, and you did. I thought it was really cool how you described the colors of the flower and compared them to her personality.


*Questionp* Flow and Readability

*Infop* It seems to mostly have an ABAB rhyming pattern, but the flow was kind of hit or miss for me. It was easy to read and comprehend what you were talking about and it held my attention from beginning to end.


*Questiong* Tone and Imagery

*Infog* There was really good imagery in this poem. My favorite stanza was the third one "A perfect combination
all white and some red
fills the imagination
distorting the head"

I liked the idea of his love for the girl distorting his mind.


*Questionv* Possible Suggestions

*Infov* I'll revisit the flow of the poem here. It seemed to have a ABAB rhyming pattern, but there were some stanzas that didn't follow this formula fully. This stanza "None can deny
for refusal is mad
with you in their eye
and turning their back" is a good example. Mad and back don't rhyme to me, so it throws the flow off a little bit. I think it's important to have a consistent rhyming pattern in a poem if you're going to make it rhyme. This part could use a little work, but I didn't see any grammar errors. Except I think "compliments" should be "complements" because compliment means a flattering remark and complements means it goes well together.


*Questionr* Final Thoughts

*Infor* Overall, I think I enjoyed the subject matter of this poem. It was cool to read about the love the narrator has for the girl through the sight of a flower. Thanks again for sharing with us.


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