An amazing amount of detail is given to setting and well rounded characters in this short story. Plot is well thought out and delivered, very original view point! I liked how you moved thestory along with dialogue, this gives a fast pace to the story and pulls readers in very well. An excellent twist at the end makes this little story stand out. Grammer, punctuation all were well handled. I couldn't find one thing I'd suggest improving, except maybe expanding it.... I was sorry when it ended!
Great job.

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