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HI angel! I am happy to do a review to celebrate you!*Balloonp*

This is a great topic for a senryu. The red font certainly adds a strong vibe to the presence on the page of this short poem which speaks to the essence of anger. I would actually use the word anger in the first line so readers can know what "IT" is. Although it may be evocative for us to ponder on all the other things it could be that do that kind of harm.

I wonder if there is a more descriptive and vivid word than "awful" to give me an image in my mind. *Wink*

The format and intent is well acheived and follow the qualities of a senryu poem.

Thanks for sharing your craft.

Light on the path as you write on!
eyestar
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