Hi Maryann!
The title and brief description sounded very intriguing, and enticed me to click on the item!
I enjoyed the account of Pam's first day on planet Earth.

What I really enjoyed:
1. The various aspects you cover -- walking, nature, food, shadows, roads ... things we tend to take for granted till we suddenly see them through the eyes of an outsider.
2. That you wrote this as a letter ('transmission'), so that you could easily include many personal details and have it flow naturally.

My suggestions:
1. The first paragraph felt like 'telling' to me. I sort of thought that Carla, being Pam's favourite cousin, would already know all of that, and you were including it to give the reader the information. Maybe you could find another way of doing this, or just make it a 'note' to the reader ... ?
2. Maybe it's just me, but I found the description of walking and of eating the ice-cream very substantial, while the other descriptions were shorter. This felt a bit lopsided. I know it's in the form of a personal letter and Pam would write how ever much she liked on each subject, but as a reader I felt I would've liked more on some of the other things!

Write On!
- Sonali

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