Hi Livia Novelle

My name is Ken and I'm reviewing your work "Cherry Blossom Tree"  on behalf of "The Earth Day Challenge" .

First Impression/Thoughts:
Having just visited the Cherry Blossom festival in Washington, D.C., I thought you captured the beauty and feel of cherry blossoms in a succinct but totally relatable way.

Creativity/Impact:
I enjoyed that you wove all the senses into this short prose description. The more senses involved, the more the reader will be able to "get inside" the writing and experience what you've created. Well done

Message/Theme:
WYSIWYG - what you see is what you get . There is a subtle theme of enjoying nature's gift that's woven into this description of your experience with cherry blossoms which I thought was really the message.

Technique/Technical Notes:

Grammar/Wording: I thought, for the most part, your descriptions were experiential and designed to invite the reader in to share this moment with you. The only note I thought was a bit jarring was in the final sentence where you broke from the delicate descriptions and used the word "mud." It brought a messy feel that just hit me as out of place. "Rich, moist earth" would have still conveyed the image in a more subtle light - but that's me .

Form/Flow: Prose is most often compared with "natural speech." I thought you did well although I could detect the poetry in your words.Some works of prose do contain traces of metrical structure or versification and a conscious blend of the two literature formats is known as prose poetry. I thought this was a beautiful example of such a blend.

Poetic/Writing devices: The use of personification (the flowers kissed my cheek) and metaphor (delicate cloud) adds dimensions that most readers will immediately identify with. The use of well reasoned "sensory" words (smell, tickle, gaze) completes the transformation from narrative to experience. Nicely done.

Emotion/Imagery: Strong on imagery, there's an undertone of awe and enjoyment in this that most readers will embrace without actually understanding how their emotions are touched. I thought your use of emotion was delicate but lifted your words to another level.

Overall Rating/Final Thoughts:
I found this a very enjoyable read. Your appreciation for nature and your enjoyment of this moment shine clearly. I found myself going back and reliving the moments I enjoyed. Thank you for sharing your imagination and talent with me today.

Writing is about communication and this is what I saw in your work and is provided solely for your use. It's offered in a spirit of wanting to give you honest feedback... nothing more.

Keep writing! Wishing you all the best for Earth Day 2014,

Ken

PS I'm returning your "auto-reward" GPs - I enjoyed the read and don't require any incentives to appreciate what you've created.

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