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| I am reviewing for Earth Day Challenge during this week, the item:
Impressions:  I thought I would choose "Environment" for a Genre to look up some interesting finds. That is how I came upon your haiku It is very curious. I wasn't sure what I had stumbled on at first, but then taking a second glance I thought I heard the "fear" of the poem speak. It is fiercer poem that one might assume. Since I have been to Detroit and know different people there including family members, I am familiar with the city. I had been there in Spring and it was quite a place. Are you supposing here the "crowded" range of politics of the environment to be at play? Or do you just want to play on the fierce sun that opens up the poem to give it a sunny day in Detroit in spring? Making a simple statement you want to make. Truthfully, I have always loved Detroit. I know that Ann Arbor is one of the best top cities for Green. Michigan may have moved that way earlier than most cities in the U.S. . The second line escapes me. Can it be that the dying earth is giving life again in Spring and with our environmental problems in this world today, cannot blossom well? Could be. It is a good line. Form, Grammar,Spelling; All three are correct.Suggestions: None at all. The haiku is just fine in its form. You have a viable one.Last comment: I enjoy haiku very much. I have trying my hand at it here at writing.com and am proud of putting a whole long progression of many in my own portfolio. Glad that you authored this too.Write on, my man!   Feather Duster aka vicki
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You responded to this review 04/24/2014 @ 12:46am EDT