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 Environmental Impacts Balanced Response  [E]
Balance is part of the environment, therefore it takes balance to respond.
by MrH
Review by Nixie
In affiliation with Earth Day Challengers  
Rated: E | (4.0)
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Initial Impression
Outstanding title! Considering the length, it still has a clear sound and is fun to think or say out loud.

Your first paragraph caught my attention because it sounded so reasonable, as if "Come on over here and listen to this."

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Further examination
Once you drew me in with your large hook, it was a natural transition to the focal point of the editorial.

The only fact I know about gasoline is that the 10% ethanol manufactured and added to the product not only is useless in improving anything, it is actually more costly to make than the gasoline.

Am I correct in my assumption that your main point was moving toward synthetics? I've heard buying synthetic oil reduces the frequency of necessary oil changes, as you stated, but I've also heard it's not true. So, who do we trust?

Fine Tuning ▼

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Closing thoughts
My one suggestion would be to expand on this. My reasoning? When I reached the end and saw the link, my thought was, "Why didn't he write a longer article if there's more to know?"

Despite the technical topic, you diluted the vast explanation so people who aren't in the industry, or in the know, were able to understand your viewpoint. *Checkg*

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