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 HI southernemma! Happy Earth Day!   Wow! Spring haiku like a breath of fresh air! You really have created a moment in time that I can visualize and I liked the imagery sweeping winds and the link to spring cleaning.  It takes me to a connection to my own spring cleaning rituals. Wish I had wind magic !This haiku form is correct in syllable and lines, natural theme and seasonal word! I think you can leave off the punctuation as haiku uses very little. I can read your haiku as one long sentence that shows a picture. I have been learning that haiku of old uses phrases instead and a bit of contrast to evoke an aha moment in the reader as he participates in the moment. Still this has the feel of coming spring and emits a lively vibe in the simple image of nature's magic.  Thanks for sharing your rendering of this challenging form. I learn from you.  Light on the path as you write on! eyestar  
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