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Compassionate Choices   [E]
For Kiya's Earth Day Challenge; a rondeau about Earth.
by Future Mrs. B
In affiliation with Earth Day Challengers  
Rated: E | (4.5)
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I am reviewing for Earth Day Challenge during this week:
 
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Compassionate Choices   (E)
For Kiya's Earth Day Challenge; a rondeau about Earth.
#1988227 by Future Mrs. B


Impressions: *Check2* I like what you called this poem for Earth Day. The word "compassionate" appears to be just the right one. Your words lean toward that. I like the span of the poem. It takes in alot. And then, as you get a bit personal in the last three lines, we identify with it.


Grammar, Spelling, Style: *Check3* Firstly, your cause is just about the best ever. Green is a must. The identification of things gone wrong creates a style of "change" for us and you really do wonders with the line:

NO MORE MONSANTO! NO DEATH! we rejoice.

This style, knowing that it is a rondeau, is a strong poem for you. Yes, awaken us, and it does.
No spelling mistakes, grammar is fine.


Suggestions: *Check3* None.

Final comment to contend with: *Check3* I especially liked that last line. It is rather original and meaningful.


Write on!

April 22nd is Earth Day!

Feather Duster
aka vicki
   *CheckG* You responded to this review 04/25/2014 @ 1:42pm EDT
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