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 | Water - A Begining  [E] Water = Life  |
| (4.0)  Hi Finn! Happy Earth Day!  I found this evocative title on the Non-fiction environment genre page and the concept it suggested stirred my muse. It had a metaphoric feel to it though it is non-fiction.  The piece is unique and sets an intent or target for potential writing or study of the topic. The first line is a relevant summation of life without water. You used effective illustration of a fact in a poetic way. Brilliant.  I think you need a period after the word "existence" as the line is a full thought and doesn't flow into the next part of the line. Period after" rubble" too.The alternate pink and black is effective. I'd like to see the sum word "powerful" centered for effect and balance. The piece does feel like a beginning and you made a good start on list of words to do with water. There are many more and I think it will be fun to explore. Good luck with your journey of discovery.  Light on the path as you write on! eyestar 
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