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The Warmth of Spring  [E]
The world was a white haze; at least what she could see of it through the ice-glazed pane.
by 🌕 HuntersMoon
Review by Nixie
In affiliation with Earth Day Challengers  
Rated: E | (4.5)
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Overall Impression
Where did you find the cover art? It's precious.

The title, The Warmth of Spring and the brief description were catchy, but did not give the plot away, as sometimes happens.

It took quite of bit of imagination to pull this story off with a credible action scientists might dream up. Clever!

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Plot/Setting/Characters
The opening paragraph had all the necessary story elements. The scene was set, characters introduced and I heard a slight undertone of danger.

The last sentence in the second paragraph confirmed my suspicions without giving away the story's future. Using italics was effective in bringing this feeling to the forefront of my mind.

Oliver and his mom were instantly likable. Their relationship was special, as in very close, which made me wonder where the dad was. But since our culture is changing and reflected in different types of families, the absence wasn't overtly distracting.

I won't spoil the story for the next reader, but you the small details you added strengthened your message and escalated the doom. (The banana part struck me as especially evocative.)

What she vaguely remembered
The adverb [vaguely] was the operative word in this sentence, establishing a time frame.

Fine Tuning ▼

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Closing thoughts
All my complaints and picky points were deflected in the final paragraph. The slight missteps were overshadowed by this poignant conclusion because the word [unremembered] stirred something deep inside me.

Your work is always original and a delight to read.

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