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Review by Nixie
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Everyday is Earth Day!

Welcome to "The Earth Day Challenge"  review activity!
I found your work under "past winners" on the group page.

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Overall Impression
From beginning to end, the prose/poetry flowed seamlessly, not letting up for air at any point. The narrator's tone was effectively haughty. I experienced both indignation and curiosity as the work progressed.


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Gliding through
The narrator's tone was effectively haughty. I experienced both indignation and curiosity as the work progressed. Sometimes, I wanted to roll my eyes, and say "Yes, you dolt, you do have to listen and take action."

—did those earth guys think of this?
This line threw suspicion my way. Was he no longer on planet earth? Then, in the final stanza, you chose to use [there] not [here] so maybe he's not on earth.

Fine Tuning ▼

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Closing thoughts
I have to agree with the narrator about the compost heap. I haven't heard that advantage purported in years and assumed the concept was no longer considered advantageous for the planet.

I won't even mention the questionable use of green font because it fits the theme so well. Your work so impressed me, I hope my review encourages you to enter again, if not this year, then the next.

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