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 From the top Good editorials spark controversy, and I have a few comments. What on earth? Because the reader has seen the title, reading it again in the body of the editorial is repetitive. We hear it again in paragraph three. In paragraph one: —no longer live as well as previous— This statement was too broad for me. Previous generations went through the Great Depression and have known times of scarcity in food and material needs. Specifically, how are we not living as well? The anecdotal comment paved the way for the editorial to begin. A reader needs to identify with the author in some way to connect with the article. Your grandfather must be much younger than mine was. My grandfather would not have encountered these issues. Perhaps a specific age or year would make this more credible? I'm not the first to say "the next war will be over water, not oil." Your editorial added credibility to the thought. "It is a matter of great concern for all thinking human beings" There are human beings who don't think? "as refined and educated human beings" We're not all refined and educated. Some are homeless and living on the street. They shouldn't be careful? Some might take this as a slap in the face. Under-educated people aren't capable of preserving our planet? Surely, it was not your intention to give this impression. I was absorbed by the paragraphs discussing deforestation because I've never thought about it to this extent. I'm sad for the trees that we destroy to serve us, but you expanded my awareness through comments new to me. The poem was an interesting insertion, but who wrote it? Should the author been given credit? Tapping bore wells in India was a foreign topic to me. I extrapolated your meaning, but would have liked an expanded definition at this point. Water-harvesting is also a new topic for me. Am I clueless and should be researching a commonly known fact? Or should there be a specific explanation as to the meaning. What does "fetching good results" mean? Precisely? What defines "good results?" Both good and bad water practices are happening in India? Bore wells and water-harvesting? I'm fascinated. Fine Tuning ▼ Closing thoughts I'm left with the feeling that I should have learned more from this editorial. Your last statement was persuasively personal, and then you expanded the message with your phrase "family of human beings." That sentence, I will remember.  My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!"  .
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