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 Hi southernemma! Happy Earth Day!   I like cardinals as they flash their scarlet on the earth's winter white coat so Here I am to check out your poem.  Your haiku has a potent image of this moment in time as a pair of cardinals do their spring dance. I like the "red robe" image and the idea of preistess. This is a brilliant metaphor here!  The language chosen mantains the metaphor and aptly describe the birds with clarity.I ike the energy of the first word as it is remniscent of spring vibrancy. The haiku form is correct in it form, line, syllable and natural theme. Each line adds to the whole with room for the reader's perspective. I don't think it needs to have captial letter except on names. I didn"t really feel a strong contrast line but enjoyed the poem immensely. This is fine expression of of the challenging haiku form. I learn from you.  Thanks for sharing your craft.Light on the path as you write on! eyestar  
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