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 | Ode to Sunsets  [E] Ode to the ever-beautiful Sunset.  |
| (4.5)  HI Shelley! Happy Earth Day!  Oh I so loved your first line with the alliterative language!  It impelled me to read on! Your weaving has created a very vivid description of sunset and its variations and the appreciaton for this time of day is clearly vibrant. It was pleasant to read as I enjoyed the sound scape and visual stimulation. words like "luminous"," vivacious", "enticing " are flowing and interesting. they suit the Ode idea too, raising the inspiration vibe.  I like the flow of line 10-11 starting with the verb. it added variety and drama. I wonder if instead of using "And" in line 8 "with" might flow better. Using bold font for sunset and the font itself is effective for this expression. I can just see it in my memory mind. Lovely.  Thanks for sharing your talent. Light on the path as you write on! eyestar  
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