Hi {suser: dblameck},
I enjoyed this erotica story but I would like to suggest some viewpoints. Feel free to disregard if any.
Title
It instantly grabbed my attention.
Plot
The opening paragraph hooked me into the story but as I read on it felt a bit drab. The imagery could be more sensual and a more well-crafted plot with a beginning, middle and an end.
Overall, a nice one. Write on!
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