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How lovely and captivating! I could have read on and on about this dream person! Very nice.

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Actually, I have only two suggestions/questions within one line...

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than anyone ere I have never met.
Should ere be "here" and should "never" be "ever"?
than anyone here I have ever met.

Favorite lines...

One fine evening in the rain
your form reluctantly presented
truer and more beautiful than before
I reached out to touch you

Lovely. I absolutely fell into it. Nice work.

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