HO! HO! HO! NO!



Hello, I am PandaPaws and I am reviewing this piece as part of the Simply Positive Group and as a contestant in Christmas In July. Of course, the opinions is this review are just that, opinions. Please use what you can and ignore the rest.


First impressions...The first time I read it I found myself singing it to myself after the first line. You kept the rhythm true to the song! Great Job!

Was the piece interesting...This was hilarious. I often wondered how Santa knew whether I was being good or bad and thanks to you I know the awful truth. Ewwww! The idea that Santa was a Peeping Tom all along gives me the heebie-jeebies. I will draw my curtains tight each night as I lay my head down to sleep. Thanks for making us all aware of Bad Santa! You have done the world a great service by revealing him for who he truly is. Thanks.

Was the content rating appropriate...I would have erred on the side of caution with this piece and given it a 13+ rating. Only because of little eyes who may be startled at a Peeping Tom Santa.


Was there rhythm and flow... You did a wonderful job maintaining the rhythm and flow of the song. The words and theme you chose fit perfectly with the original music. You did this all without making any of the phrases seem forced. Awesome job!


Any errors in grammar, spelling, or punctuation...I noted no errors in any of these areas.

Things I would change... I would change the following line...

You have a really sickly mind

to

You have an awful, sick mind

There are two reasons I would change this; first, I prefer not to use -ly adverbs in my writing. They tend to be weak descriptions. I also, believe that the rhythm of the suggested line is better.

Favorite parts/lines... This, by far, was my favorite part...

Don’t come near my Christmas tree
There is a shocking fence that you can't see.

The idea of a charged fence and Santa getting zapped by it tickled my funny bone!

Wonderful Job!


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My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .