Review number # 1 of week July 17-23, 2014

Hi Jen

My name is Lyn and I am doing a review for Simply Positive.

Please remember I am a writer, I know what it feels like to be reviewed! I have only my humble opinion to offer; please take what you feel is helpful and disregard the rest. Only YOU know what is right for your writing!

Title: Red Rose

First Impression: I love roses too!

What I liked: The image of the soft silky buds ever flowing that came to mind.

What needs your attention: The last line in the second stanza I think would sound better if you put And, I feel sad again. The way it is and feel sad yet again just does not sound right when read outloud.

Favorite Parts: The comparison of the red rose to sweet soft red lips to kiss. I love the feel of a rose as well, so in my mind I knew exactly what you meant.

Overall Impression: This poem with some work could be awesome. I feel it needs some more details about the rose, maybe more comparisons so the reader can connect on more than one level

Thank you for letting me read your work. It was my pleasure!
Lyn




My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .