Review number 5 # of week July 17- 23rd, 2014

Hi TJ Marie

My name is Lyn and I am doing a review for Simply Positive.

Please remember I am a writer, I know what it feels like to be reviewed! I have only my humble opinion to offer; please take what you feel is helpful and disregard the rest. Only YOU know what is right for your writing!

Title: Christmas Fairy in July

First Impression: The Christmas fairy really didn't sound happy at all.

What I liked: Alex tried to help and was not taken back by the sharpness of the fairies tone or accusations.

What needs your attention: I really think visually your poem would look stronger centered on the page like it was going to jump off the page. I feel it shows the authors confidence in their work when it is presented that way. There are several lines when you read it out loud that would be better broken into two lines losing the word and. I recommend you read it out loud or have some one do it so you can hear the way it looses its flow.

Favorite Parts: I am glad the fairy returned to remind Alex that Christmas spirit is possible everyday because the magic is in your heart. Great closing.

Overall Impression: Has lots of potential.

Thank you for letting me read your work. It was my pleasure!
Lyn




My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .