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 Jean the proud girl & her three friends  [E]
This is a short story that has a moral lesson.
by Ruthy
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Hello there,
Welcome to WDC.
I like the way you wrote the story, it is short but precise. I think you could also add some description of this beautiful girl. You say she's beautiful, but readers won't be able to visualize her. Please adjust the font size of the last two lines, it's very small.
Keep creating

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