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Review of Sunken Song  
Review by Charlie ~
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Hey, Cinn Frin. I'm happy to be reviewing your poem, "Invalid Item"   by A Guest Visitor . Thanks for sharing with us. *Bigsmile*



*Buttonplay* First Impressions

I like the title of this one, especially in relation to the fourth stanza where you talk about all the instruments sinking into the mud. They make up the "sunken song" of the lake that was once a town. I read your poem, "Invalid Item"  today as well. I really enjoyed that one, but I agree that free-verse is your strongest suit.


*Thumbsup* What I liked

The best part of this poem, and a lot of your other poems, is the imagery that you use. I've never been to a lake that used to be a town, but after reading your poem, I feel like I have been. You hit on every sense when describing the things seen at the lake and the sound of boots in mud. I've walked through mud before, at least, it does make a sort of sucking sound and it feels like it's pulling you down in it, too.

This one has that surreal feel to it like the last one I reviewed. I can picture this town and the people who once inhabited it. I wonder what happened to it and to those people. You have such a knack for putting the reader into a situation and making them experience it.


*Skull* What Could Use Work

I hate this part the most. *Laugh* I can never think of anything to say here when everything's cool with the grammar and it's a free-verse poem. I don't see any issues. ¯\_(ツ)_/¯


*Peace2* Summary

I can see why you like this poem. It's an interesting one to say the least. Thanks again for sharing.




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