Hello 🌕 HuntersMoon ,

Thank you so much for entering "Invalid Item"  into The First Round of "Invalid Item" .

My name is Darleen and I'll be reviewing your prose piece as an official judge of this contest and want to remind you that I realize that for some, writing is a very personal experience, and some criticism can be taken personally.

Keep in mind that I'm merely basing my review off my own personal interpretation of your work and don't feel obligated to use any suggestions that may lie within. I consider myself a forever student.

Hopefully you'll find this review helpful and encouraging!



Ken and xenology, not something I imagined but definitely enjoyed! My Nano Novel main character is a Xenologist, so I was attracted to this merely by the description alone and how it would be inspired by the prompt. I was not disappointed at all by this unique tale with an unexpected twist



Rolf is the main character of this tale, a Xenologist, a man seemingly lost in a beautiful memory of his wife Lucille when we begin this story. Soon we find out he's a men with a mind strong enough to at least fight back.

Natives ~ Natives of Proxima Centauri P3 that the good Dr is trying to learn more about.




In the beginning the setting is that of a tent filled with furs only to learn the setting is actually in a mud and straw hut.




Rolf has been caught by the native species of an alien world. Human dreams disrupt the telepathic nature of the inhabitants creating a mental poison. Now Rolf becomes a prisoner and does the only thing he knows how to fight back.




The conflict is the natural sleep state of humans interrupting the telepathic balance of the native inhabitants of the planet. A good conflict indeed.




The climax satisfies us enough to know that Rolf is fighting back and winning, at least for the moment.



Expand, expand, expand! I love the idea behind this story, it got my mind churning. I wanted to know more details about the alien species, their abilities, and what happens next... does Rolf make it does he escape? I didn't really need the answers to the final questions, but more details surrounding the rest of the story to bring me into the tale more deeply.



The story cant work without each of it's connecting parts. it's set up perfectly, you beginning expecting one thing, wake up to reality and ended the story in a way that left me wanting more. I can't pick one favorite part but I got real sucked into it when he woke up to the cold water.



Well done, fascinating premise, great job, Ken. i hope you're writing more stories, cause this is a very inspiring piece!

I enjoyed reading your work and hope my review was helpful and encouraging!

My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .