Hello Jimmy,

I found your story "Goodbye" on the Random Review and I enjoyed reading it.

I am not an English major or an expert in grammar. I am simply offering my humble opinion concerning your work.

I hope you find this feedback useful

Overall Impression:I found your story very heart breaking for both Maggie and her husband. A gripping story about the depth of ones love for another. I did not like the ending but feel like you have a strong piece here. I really thought that when he looked over at Maggie for the last time as his medication was ending his life, she was going to open her eyes from her deep sleep not being dead at all.

Scene/Setting:Maggie's husband had planned for this day for a while. He had his death researched and planed out, and all the necessary ingredients were at his disposal.

Characters:The love that Maggie's husband had for his wife was conveyed through your writing. It was sad that he could not continue on in life. Not being one who supports suicide, I would have liked to see him honor her by the things he could accomplish with his remaining time on earth.

Grammar and Mechanics:I found nothing wrong with your writing.

Suggestions:My only suggestion would be to continue to write you definitely are blessed with talent.

Thank you for sharing your story.

I welcome you to visit my portfolio and offer a review on any piece that may interest you

Rozebud

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My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .