Hello there, pinkbarbie

I'm here as you left an Eid greeting in my notebook. Consider this review as my Eid gift for you.

What I liked: The language used is very simple, and people of all ages would enjoy this story. It is a little lengthy, but there's a lot of variety in here. The smooth flow and different characters prevent monotony.
Events unfold one by one, instead of being told all at once.

You could add: You could use a bit of "showing" instead of telling the whole story. I could guess that the prince is thin and the princess fat, but you could add a bit more about their appearance, etc. You could also try using a header image for this.

There's nothing I disliked here. Keep writing, and Eid Mubarak!

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