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Given: Aug 11, 2014 at 11:45pm
Length: 779 Characters |
775 w/o WritingML
Hi Ben
A pretty good personal experience well narrated. Sentence flow and the feelings converged well to make the situations clear to the reader. Reality has a charm of its own, I realize. It sounds like love at first sight, yet it took for a while for the guy to say so. "Nordic blonde" brings to my mind the vision of a tall golden beauty of strength and stamina.
Your simile somewhat had me befuddled- "she was built like a brick pizzeria" I never heard of a woman being compared to a shop. I couldn't get the connection.
The evolving relationship, as I see is based on her innocence and frank expression and his considerateness of her situation instead of taking advantage of the offered goods.
A new kind of story for me, which I have enjoyed.
Write on!
You responded to this review 08/12/2014 @ 12:31am EDT
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