Hello elahehfiryal,

I found your story "Summer"  to be a very pleasant and enjoyable read.

I don't pretend to be an English major or an expert in grammar. I am simply offering my humble opinion concerning your work. I hope you find this feedback useful

Overall Impression:
I found your story while pursuing the review a newbie folder and the title caught my attention. Spring and summer are my favorite times of year because of the physical beauty you described in your well written story.
You used descriptive language in such a way that I could envision the "Colorful flowers splashed across my pathway." Your story freely invokes a sense of peace and oneness with nature as you take that summer walk.
This is a story to bookmark and read this winter when I am hibernating from the snow and frigid temperatures to give me some hope of what is to come.

Grammar and Mechanics:
The word Colourful (colorful) is not spelled correctly. I saw no problems with your writing mechanics or grammar

Suggestions:
The only suggestion I have is to keep putting pen to paper (or fingers to keyboard) You are very talented and I look forward to reading/reviewing more of your work.

I also see you are new to WDC and want to welcome you

Thank you for sharing your story.

I welcome you to visit my portfolio and offer a review on any piece that may interest you

Rozebud

** Images For Use By Upgraded+ Only **

My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .