Review number # 10 of week Aug 7-13th, 2014

Hi Norb,

My name is Lyn and I am doing a review for Simply Positive.

Please remember I am a writer, I know what it feels like to be reviewed! Please take what you feel is helpful and disregard the rest. Only YOU know what is right for your writing!

Title: Blur the Future

First Impression: You wrote this on my son's birthday, the one that is the same age as you. That's a strange coincidence.

What I liked: We all go to the churches of our own good intentions. I have never thought of like this but it is so true. I would be a millionaire if I had a dollar for every good intention I had in my lifetime.

What needs your attention: aggrivated should be aggravated.

Favorite Parts: I laid it out and tried it on and it never fit right. Life would be so much easier if each of us did that before getting in deeper and deeper, there would be a lot less heartache. We kid ourselves into thinking that one or the other will change but we only delude ourselves.

Overall Impression: Another well written poem, clearly spoken from the heart.

Thank you for letting me read your work. It was my pleasure!
Lyn




My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .