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The title is quite catchy and I have found a recent interest in dark items and here I am reading another dark poem The poem sent shivers down my spine and it was quite gloomy and the reader could feel the dark emotions going through her mind.

In my perspective, the flow of the poem was well on reading and I liked most of the metaphors and sentences used in your poem.
Does the poem flow well on reading?
What meter has been used? Is it smooth or awkward?

I think that you are capable of writing non-rhyming poetry therefore you should definitely give it another try. The thing I would suggest for your poem is using a better vocabulary and make the poem precise. I read the poem and I liked it but what confused me was that the main theme or the thing which the poem is about is kind of hazy, it's not very clear to the reader. You might want to clear it in maybe the brief description or change the poem accordingly

There were some really well written verses in your poem. This was my favourite!



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