I had such a detailed and thorough review done and then the site and Explorer stopped working, making it all disappear.

I did find this a bit confusing as did the reader you mentioned. You started out great with the stained pages of poetry, and the shuffle, tumble, crumble part was great, flows off the tongue. lol

I think that you could use some division spots to help the reader know and understand the shifts in your thinking. The 'same object' seems to still refer to writing but then you switch to higher self, galactic awareness and other life forms. That may be where the other reader got confused.

Dust that burns and broken hearts and dreams seem to be another break area. I'm not sure how it blends into the shoes. I did however like the title. That is what drew me in. Thanks so much for sharing.
love, LinnAnn