Good luck on your entry in the Dragon's Keep contest. As a fellow competitor who has read your story after I wrote mine, I find it interesting we both wrote about a silver dragon. You started out your story strong in showing us who your main characters are. There was great suspense build for action to happen in this story in the first part. When you did get to some parts where some action such as sword fights or magic fights and you could have gone either way here, I feel you skimmed over these scenes; it did feel like there should have been more. Especially when there was so much being pushed about this journey being dangerous, I feel that the danger could have been more descriptive. I feel you have done very well in setting the scene for your story, excellent interaction with your characters, and I love you fantasy theme here. You have a great imagination. Overall, very well written and I feel this could be better if you give more detailed fight scenes. Once again good luck.

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