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Review of Middle Child  
Review by ~ Aqua ~
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Rated: E | (3.5)
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*Beach* Greetings!

The following are only my personal opinions. Ultimately, you and only you can decide what works best for your item.

Such an amazing poem! It is simple and could be made better with a few edits as I have mentioned below but really good theme! I could be said like a middle child and I know how it feels like! The responsibility on your shoulders, for both your younger siblings and well towards our parents and other. The theme of your poem is good and the favourite thing was that you turned such a negative thing into a positive one! I really didn't expect it and it was like a surprise to me!

The edits that I was talking about earlier include having a consistent rhyming scheme. I liked your beginning and the first stanza had a good pattern. However it totally changes from the first stanza. It would be better if you let the reader know of a particular form you are using or write that it's a free verse. I would suggest another thing and that is, you might want to add more vocabulary, or use a high level wording in poetry *Smile*

*TulipY**Sun*Thank you for allowing me to read and review your poem. *Sun**Tulipy*

Write On!
Take care and Have a great day!

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