Review number # 5 of week August 14-20, 2014

Hi Minara

My name is Lyn and I am doing a review for Simply Positive.

Please remember I am a writer, I know what it feels like to be reviewed! Please take what you feel is helpful and disregard the rest. Only YOU know what is right for your writing!

Title: The Despairs of a Small Elf

First Impression: I felt so sad for Ivy, life was not what she had hoped. Evil existed all around her and she could not see a way past it to safety.

What I liked: Why couldn't they have left me in Heathshire, sipping a nice cup of tea. That made me chuckle, clearly little ivy has a sense of humor hidden behind the fear.

What needs your attention: Nothing, that jumped out at me.

Favorite Parts: I feel like they are children Kashy and Forgen looking for the voice they overheard mumbling to herself. Ivy is so afraid, she does not realize they are not her worse fears. I felt Ivy's fear, you did an excellent job drawing the reader into her despair.

Overall Impression: It was a very enjoyable read and I am glad I chose to check out. I hope Ivy is safe and does find her way home. I thought the images you created with the lovely tree that grew over Lillior were delightful. A very nice introduction to Ivy's despair.

Thank you for letting me read your work. It was my pleasure!
Lyn




My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .