Hello Cheri,

I found your story "Choices"  while I was browsing the review a newbies tab.

I don't pretend to be an English major or an expert in grammar. I am simply offering my humble opinion concerning your work. I hope you find this feedback useful

Overall Impression:
I thought your story was emotional and a good read. I thought the way you described her environment was done really well. The dingy walls, cracked ceiling and the splintered door helped to describe the hell she was in. I liked the way you finished the story with the phone call to mom.

Grammar and Mechanics:
I saw no problems with your writing mechanics or grammar

Suggestions:
The only suggestion I have is to keep putting pen to paper (or fingers to keyboard) You are very talented and I look forward to reading/reviewing more of your work.

I also see you are new to WDC and want to welcome you

Thank you for sharing your story.

I welcome you to visit my portfolio and offer a review on any piece that may interest you

Rozebud

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