Hi ☮ The Grum Of Grums .
I have just read your poem "A Challenge To Fate"  and wanted to share my thoughts with you. Please keep in mind this is only my opinion. Feel free to use what works for you and disregard the rest. Your work is ultimately your own.
This review is done in conjunction with the PDG Alumni Challenge and for Dark Dreamscapes.


Overall Impressions:
I love the title. It drew me in and I followed your journey out of the darkness and into the light. It begins in the heaviness of feeling life has cast you in this role, this certain way, but as I move with the poet along the journey I see the light peak through and the darkness lift. I like the idea of making the choice and to choose to live out of the dark.


Techniques:
I am a novice poet. I play with words and though I love to write poems my knowledge is on the more limited side. Your work is ultimately yours.
I believe your lines follow along using enjambment to keep the motion going.


Rhyme and Rhythm:
You have chosen to follow an ABAB pattern within each of your stanzas.
Most lines holds to eight beats - that is my preference as well, it seems to feel right somehow. The line "Castigated by a rod" is only 7, I believe. Not sure what I would suggest to round it out.

Favourite Part:
How can it be we hear the voice
Of pain, depression, doom and dread?
Can we not then make the choice
Of hope and joy and love instead?

I love how the poet starts to see the light, see the promise of there being something more.


Enough! The world is ours to find
To live each day as if our last
Then we can leave the past behind
And choose a future bright and fast.

After two stanzas the poet says "Enough" They have made the choice and it is a wise choice.

Suggestions:
I saw no issues with spelling. Punctuation seems fine, though when it comes to poetry I am not good in that area.

I would only suggest one more beat in the line "Castigated by a rod." to make it follow your 8 beat rhythm.


Additional Comments:
I really enjoyed this poem. I love those poems that draw out of the darkness and find the light.


I enjoyed reading your work. Thank you for sharing it. I hope my review was helpful and encouraging!

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My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .