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Plot and Content: I thought this was an interesting concept, the idea of a girl dying and the narrator describes how her life could've been better if she had not taken her life. For that, I gave you a higher rating.

Errors/Suggestions: I found quite a few errors, there were missing quotation marks and some words were misspelled. Here is a mistake: and she to blames herself The word "to" should be changed to "too"

As a suggestion, I think this should be expanded, I would like to see more of this story. It would make a great short story of a thousand or two-thousand words.

What I liked: I liked how you described the reasons she shouldn't have taken her life, it goes to show that people who are suicidal should take inventory of their lives and be appreciative of all the blessings they have.