Hellofroth ,

I just looked for a random review, and this came up. Here's what I think about your piece. Please remember, I'm a writer like you and can only offer my suggestions.

Title: Perfect for the story, as it had a fairy tale ending.

Language and Layout: Though the paragraphs look a little clustered, I enjoyed the story from beginning to end. The atmosphere created was indeed magical. Events unfolded gradually, preventing monotony.

Question: Is forgiveness really so easy? Especially after everything that happened with her?

Suggestion: Just work a bit on the layout to make it a bit more visually appealing. Enlarge the font size, that way it would be easier to read.

Overall: A perfect read, keep writing!









My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .