Hello there jasonb

I found your post in one of my forums, so I flew in to read some of your items. Remember, I'm a writer like you, and can only offer my suggestions. Here's what I think about your lyrics:

Title: Many of the writers here would feel the same way as you. The title's perfect for this poem.

Rythm,Language and Layout: The lyrics rhyme well, and I like the way you've pointed out how it should be sung. Did you figure out the music for this?

Some little edits: In the last line of verse 1, is should be was.
Verse 2, third line, thought should be think.
Never knew, can be didn't know.
Last line, couldn't should be can't.

Overall: A perfect tribute to WDC, Keep writing!












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