Hello Eliza Rose ,

I found your wish in one of my forums, and here I am, to read your work. Remember, I am a writer like you, and can only offer my suggestions:

Title: The title made me think that you might have a human character in here, and you didn't.

Language and layout: At first I didn't understand who the speaker is. I kept on reading, and the last two lines stood out for me. Just perfect. You've given the reader many points to ponder on.

The font size is a bit too small, it hurt my eye. Please try to enlarge it a bit.

Overall: An enjoyable piece, keep writing!



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