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*Frog* Written in rhyming couplets, this poem hops down the page with great style and ease. The rhymes are good and there is a story to be found within the verses of the poem.


*Frog*Not many authors, or readers, give much thought to placement or alignment, when it comes to poetry. It is my thought that something as simple as where or how you place a poem on the page, can add to its imagery. Poetry is up to the interpretation of the reader. What a poet writes, and the message a reader gets isn't always the same, especially when using metaphors. That being said, aligning a poem to the left of a page may imply unification; all is right in the world. Centering an item so that all the lines are askew, based upon the character count, can have the meaning of chaos and turmoil in life or emotion. Though keep in mind, this is just my personal feelings on the subject, and not all will agree with this. Though, it does give one something to consider.

*Frog* When something is written in another program and then copy and pasted over to this site, oftentimes extra spacing will show up between each line. This is a minor distraction, but it does allow the reader's eyes to drift away from the main plot or idea of the poem.

I would suggest going back and tightening each verse so that the only double spacing was between each verse. This will help to bring the poem together and hold the reader's attention better.

*Frog*Overall a nice poem that was well thought out. I didn't notice any spelling or grammatical issues to point out.



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