Dialogue Contest Entry - Digital Art [E] My first contest entry - Dialogue. |
Hey! This is a WDC Power Reviewers Review! Please remember that these are just my thoughts and somebody else might see it differently! Initial hook and title: Hey I saw this up on the Read a Newbie page so I thought I'd come and read it for you Storyline: I enjoyed reading this piece! I always admire it when someone writes a piece entirely in dialogue and I'm able to follow it, I don't always thinks it's an easy thing to do and I know I struggle with it. It tells the story of two friends chatting over coffee and maybe looking for something more. Pacing and flow: This piece flows well and offers a good balanced conversation that flows naturally. Characters: Savannah and Eric are the two people here. We know it's Savannah initially and I thought perhaps a girl-friend so I was a little surprised that it was a male but then there wasn't anything to suggest it was a female either. Perhaps that's the way my mind works! Setting: The setting in this piece changes and I think you did that well going from campus to the coffee shop through the dialogue. I even like the way you put the server in there too, it adds a lot. Atmosphere and tone: There's a strong tone of friendship here and perhaps the hint of something more. Nicely done. Dialogue: AS I say I thought the dialogue flowed well and felt like a natural conversation. Hope this helped! Well done on a good write!! Reviewed on behalf of the WDC Power Reviewers: ** Images For Use By Upgraded+ Only ** My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .
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