I love that line! Dream dreamer dreaming... That's a pretty cool phrase to build a poem from. It' kind of catchy too! This was a good poem. It tells an interesting story.

I loved how many instances of imagery you used. The crocus sky... the dawn of a melodious song... it's beautiful! You did have some trouble though, with the punctuation. I felt like I needed to take a breath when I read this. Putting in some commas or a period here or there could really help the flow of the poem by telling the reader where to pause and take it all in.

I like these three lines because I thought they flowed very well:

...From day to night
Reliefs sigh
After cavalcades of trifling...

Write on!

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