Hello stephenj This is a Simply Positive Review! I'm also judging your entry for the Bard's Hall Contest. I have to say I am pleasantly surprised and happy-dancing right now. Do you know how many of your fellow countrymen, complained to me that "baseball and Chevrolet" were American things that they couldn't relate to, where they lived. I am so thrilled you took the challenge, because your vivid imagination took me on a adventure with the Bunyip! Thank you for your definitions of these various words, and phrases that added to the local color of your region, and made it a clear picture in my mind's eye. I loved the story, the pace and the characters. Your use of the prompt words was spot on and did not sound out of place or forced into a paragraph for the sake of naming them. YAY! A little typo, here: "He rubbed the baseball still stuck on the bump head tenderly again." [bumped] Thanks for entering the contest. I really enjoyed your take on the prompt. Good luck! Regards, WebWitch My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .
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