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An interesting piece, this is written in a format of a paragraph, giving little direction to the reader. Sometimes how an item is formatted on the page can make the world of difference. Spacing, punctuation, and how the poem cascades down a page directs the reader how to interpret the poem. Not many authors, or readers, give much thought to placement or alignment, when it comes to poetry. It is my thought that something as simple as where or how you place a poem on the page, can add to its imagery. Poetry is up to the interpretation of the reader. What a poet writes, and the message a reader gets isn't always the same, especially when using metaphors. That being said, aligning a poem to the left of a page may imply unification; all is right in the world. Centering an item so that all the lines are askew, based upon the character count, can have the meaning of chaos and turmoil in life or emotion. Though keep in mind, this is just my personal feelings on the subject, and not all will agree with this. Though, it does give one something to consider.

You wrote:
The tension of the land is a curse according to sin and the beast within is breathing contempt on all who face the ground. So slither you who have a heart so hollow today and do not be a crutch trying to help all in the way.

I suggest:
The tension of the land
is a curse
according to sin
and the beast within
is breathing contempt
on all who face the ground.

So slither you
who have a heart
so hollow today
and do not be a crutch
trying to help
all in the way.

I actually see this more as lyrics for a song, and I don't know why that is. Overall this is well written and I found it to be thought provoking.

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