"WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group" 

Please remember that you are the best judge of what is right for your story! Whatever I say, whether positive or negative, is just my opinion! You are the only one who can decide what is right for your story.

Hi K.B, I found your story, Airplane Mode, the Read a Newbie page. I wanted to share some thoughts with you about it. First of all welcome to WdC!

Hooks: A hook is the best way to draw your readers in and make them want to continue reading. What I look for in hooks are the title, the story description, and the first paragraph. I like the title. Your story description is a question that I will try to help you answer.

Overall Impression: I think this story has potential. I like the plot. The story has a clear beginning, middle, and end, which is an important element of a short story. I like the characters and many of the images the story conjures up.
My problem is I find parts of the story hard to understand. I’m wondering if English is your first language?

Grammar/Punctuation/Spelling : There are a lot of grammar issues, and I didn’t find the dialogue natural. One trick you could try is to say the sentence out loud first, and then write it down exactly as you said it. Another thing you could do is have someone help you edit the story.

Final Thoughts : I wouldn’t throw the story out because it is interesting, and could be saved. I suggest trying to improve your grammar and then doing an edit of this story. If you do this, I would be happy to take another look at it.