"WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group" 

Hi Chardon, I’m reviewing Campbell Can for the WDC 14th Birthday Sr. Mod. Challenge.

Hooks:
I think a hook is the best way to draw your readers in and make them want to continue reading. What I look for in hooks are the title, the story description, and the first paragraph. The title would be more interesting if you left out the bitem link and just titled it Campbell Can. The story description is good and lets the reader know what to expect.

My Favorite Lines:
charging on red rag target-
sun

Overall Impression: I found this poem both charming and amusing. I love tomato soup, and your poem brings images to my mind's eye of enjoying a mug of soup after playing in the snow, skating, and other outdoor events, Tomato soup has always been one of my comfort foods.

In this minimalistic, words only poem you conveyed a good image of a can of soup. From your description, I can see that can of soup, and am tempted to go heat up a can on this dismal rainy day!

To get your poem out there you need to have it posted under more genres. After you click on static item, look in section 3 Genres and keywords. You will see three boxes, click on each and look at all the choices, try to find one from each box that applies to your item. Avoid Other or None if at all possible! This will give your item move visibility. In the box Relevant Keywords: write as many words as you can think of that apply to the story. You could write poetry, tomato soup, etc. You should use at least 10 keywords, so anyone doing a search will be likely to see your poem pop up.

Final Thoughts: Thank you for sharing this poem, I hope you can find something useful in my comments. Write On