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| (4.5)| Hi there, hawkmoth Nice Handle! Welcome to WDC from "Newbie Welcome Wagon" !  My name is Teerich - 2019 I am a writer just like you. I am not here to judge you. Please bear in mind that anything I say is just my humble opinion.  It is my honour to read your work. Use whatever you can and send the rest fluttering off into the ether for another day. I am reviewing your short Story, "Sirena" today as part of my mission to review Newbies.I browsed your port after seeing your name in The Newbies Spotlight Your Title and Tagline caught my attention. It is, indeed a short story. A micro story. They say good things come in small packages. This is no exception.   There is a poeticism to your writing that was compelling. The lyrical flow of your words was hypnotic. This beautiful piece about the legend of mermaids luring sailors to their deaths speaks to me as a poet. I love the way you describe the mesmerised sailor drawn to his death by the beautiful voice of the mermaid.  The prose presentation does no favours for this story The story would have so much more impact if you presented it in short phrases. I wonder if you have ever considered writing Free Verse. Thank you for allowing me to review your work. I hope you find my comments useful. sincerely,       Terri ** Images For Use By Upgraded+ Only **  My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .
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You responded to this review 09/03/2014 @ 5:25am EDT